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Permalink Reply by coco on September 25, 2012 at 18:00

Hey Doggy!  Come here!  Give me that.  Good boy!  What is that?  Let me see...  A mobile phone.  Hello!  hello!  The answering machine...  "Hi honey!  Where are you?  I'm waiting for you darling.  Hurry up!  Dinner is ready."  Suddenly Doggy run toward the lake.  Doggy come here!  Doggy don't stop so I follow him.  What a surprise!  There was a man lying on the ground near a tree.  He seems to have a lot of pain.  Can  I help you sir?  I fell while jogging, he said.  I hurt my ankle so I cannot walk.  Ok sir, my car is near here, I will drive you to the hospital.   Oh by the way, is this yours?  Yes thanks, he said I lost it.  So you must call your wife, I said to him. Ok sir, hold on me and let's go....

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 25, 2012 at 22:16

The dog is the hero in this story. :)

Very nice story again Coco. Well written and very easy to follow. I like it!

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Permalink Reply by coco on September 25, 2012 at 22:34

Thank you very much Teacher Jamie!!!

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 25, 2012 at 21:18

The voice said "Help, I have fallen down a very large hole and broken my leg". I looked at the phone, it was the same as mine. My phone had a flat battery. I removed the battery from the phone I had found. I placed that battery in my phone. I threw the old phone and my old battery on the ground and walked away. I was no good at first aid anyway.

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Permalink Reply by coco on September 25, 2012 at 22:05

Nice funny story, but poor man I can imagine he is still waiting for help...   :)

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 26, 2012 at 20:59

They don't call that phone a brick for nothing!

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Permalink Reply by Gertraud Müller on September 26, 2012 at 21:06

I pressed the answer button and listened..There was a voice , it sounds a little bit strange. I guess it was a man. He asked me " Do you like real adventure games" ? This phone is your first step to a big adventure. I was so surprised that I couldn't answer immediatly. My dog began to bark , he starts sniffing around and ran away the path to the forest. I tried to call him back but he didn't listen to me. Than all of a sudden the man began talking to me again. He said " follow your dog and you'll get the next clue. Now I was really afraid. Why did  he know that my dog rans away ?

And how is this man? What do you think happened next ?

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 27, 2012 at 10:20

Oooh, this is an interesting start to a story. It reminds me of the SAW films - but I hope it doesn't end in the same way! 

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 27, 2012 at 10:24

Now I want to phone somebody up and quote the lyrics to Call me Maybe! 

I hope the cheese tart was on the house! This is one of those stories where all the pieces fit nicely together at the end. I like the idea!

I would have added a twist at the end. Daniel is actually your husband! There would have been a very different ending to your story!

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 29, 2012 at 14:02

Yoda may be on to something there. 

As long as you keep the dog and get everything on the house then everything will be alright in the end. :)

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Permalink Reply by Ngo Thanh Cong on September 29, 2012 at 3:30

I pressed the answer button and listened....There was no sound in the beginning. I spoke into the phone and tried to understand what the hell was going on! no answer again. I tended to hang up then a scary mysterious grin came out of the phone. I was so frightened that I dropped it on the ground. there was one line I could see on the screen : " Disconnected !"  I started to calm down, suddenly, the phone rang again, this time was a message. I picked it up and started to read, it said:" run towards the wood, you'll see an old wooden house, then get inside, another clue is waiting for you...." my heart beat like a drum and the goose bumps spread through my arms and belly after I’d read it. My dog’s bark seemed to wake me up. I got my control back, thought of things’d happened. “ why am I involved in these stuffs?  what’s going on? The scrary grin and the message? “ I still could not guess what’s happening no matter how hard I tried. There was no choice, I could go home, and ignored all of them. “ But what if someone needs help” I thought. After a few minutes, I decided to join the game, no matter what it was ...

To be continued...

p/s : correct my grammar if you see teacher, :) , thank you !

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TeacherPermalink Reply by English Teacher Jamie on September 30, 2012 at 11:41

Very nice writing again Cong!

A few comments:

...this time there was a message.

...towards the woods.

...my heart was beating like a drum. I like this sentence Cong!

 

I'm interested to see what happens next in the game. You've left us with a real cliffhanger! When will we see part 2?

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